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    KhaixRoze
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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by KhaixRoze on Sat Oct 13, 2018 6:36 am


    身体闪烁 • { 执政官 } | Shēnti Shánshōu • Zhízhèn Güån | Body Flicker Technique • { Archon }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C | 5
    Upkeep Cost: ~
    Range: Shunshin | Body Flicker Technique
    Speed: ±1 Tier Speed
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique: Body Flicker Technique
    Hand Seals: 野兔 | Yétü | Hare
    Description: The caster is able to move in an arc in almost instantaneous untraceable speed while temporarily masking the user's movements with proper custom visual variations; blink and stream of light. This technique is used to get around and behind an opponent without sacrificing multiple Shunshins, streaming around both thier attacks and case. Shunshin Arciero gifts the same boost, thus scales normally along the ascendant Shunshin technique. Provided that the user holds the hand seal for activation, they are allowed to move in a full circle around the adversary.
    Weaknesses:~
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    闪电颠簸 { 休克 } | Shǎndiànbó • { Xüîkë } | Lightning Jolt Technique • { Shock }
    Rank: B
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: B | 10
    Upkeep Cost: C | 5
    Range: Personal - Close { 0hm -  36m }
    Speed: Variable w/ Coordination -¹
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique:
    Hand Seals: 野兔 •  绵羊 • 公鸡 | Yétü • Míanyäng • Gōngjï  | Hare • Sheep • Rooster
    Description: The caster charges their natural sources from the center of her abdomen and further into her hands. After weaving the corresponding sigils the charge of the chakra within the hands will fizzle until the nature of lightning emanates from the palms. The lightning shall naturally coat over the hands, bringing the sound of crackling thunder, shining in a sporadic color of violet and deep indigo. The caster will point them at a target, releasing the cluster of lightning toward an adversary. This cluster of lightening energy jumps from the caster's hands and clings towards it's extended target, latching the elemental nature unto and throughout their body. This cannot be avoided by armor, shatters enchantments, and sunders barriers.

    Upon contact, the technique shocks the opponent, as the name implies, sending an electrifying jolt of energy throughout their body. If the constitution of the adversary is below that of B, the jolt spikes throughout the adversaries nervous system, shortening out there synaptic receptors, causing involuntary movement and spasming pains stunning them for a post. Due to the electrical composition, lightning current and exertion of the shock, similar to fire, exposure to such a technique damages the adversary with second degree burns over their body. By applying upkeep, the adversary will stay stunned. Afterwards, This technique inhibits the movement of the adversary, hampering their speed by a tier { ±±± } and coordination with a major disadvantage { ±± } for two turns.
    Weaknesses:~


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    Character Name:
    Léï Zhènyün
    ~ Ijutstu, Ninjutsu, Kuchiyôse, Fuuinjutsu, Chemistry ~
    Ïnazüma; Storm ~ Tempest, Ray, Cloud

    Stats:



    [*]Strength: E
    [*]Constitution: C
    [*]Stamina: B ~ 160
    [*]Speed: S
    [*]Coordination: C
    [*]Intelligence: B
    [*]Perception: C

    Limit Break Points:

    [*]Physical:
    [*]Technique:
    [*]Destiny: 3

    Link to Known Techniques: ~ Medusozoans and Eel Summons, Cloudian Air, Opacity, Railgun, Tempest, Yunigan



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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by Uchiha Akihiro on Sat Oct 13, 2018 1:27 pm

    身体闪烁 • { 执政官 } | Shēnti Shánshōu • Zhízhèn Güån | Body Flicker Technique • { Archon }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C | 5
    Upkeep Cost: ~
    Range: Shunshin | Body Flicker Technique
    Speed: ±1 Tier Speed
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplementary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique: Body Flicker Technique
    Hand Seals: 野兔 | Yétü | Hare
    Description: The caster is able to move in an arc in almost instantaneous untraceable speed while temporarily masking the user's movements with proper custom visual variations; blink and stream of light. This technique is used to get around and behind an opponent without sacrificing multiple Shunshins, streaming around both their attacks and case. Shunshin Arciero gifts the same boost, thus scales normally along the ascendant Shunshin technique. Provided that the user holds the hand seal for activation, they are allowed to move in a full circle around the adversary.
    Weaknesses:~

    Denied, mostly due to wording.
    * This is a big no no. You get a 1 Tier boost to speed. Whether that is traceable or not depends entirely on your opponent's Perception.
    I also took the liberty of correcting minor spelling errors. On another note, you don't need to hold the hand-seal to get this boost. Why not just put up a 5 upkeep cost and get the same effect with your hands-free?
    Also please note that if this technique doesn't debuff Perception then the blink and stream of light are merely cosmetics and won't affect your opponent's ability to trace.



    闪电颠簸 { 休克 } | Shǎndiànbó • { Xüîkë } | Lightning Jolt Technique • { Shock }
    Rank: B
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: B | 10
    Upkeep Cost: C | 5
    Range: Personal - Close { 0hm - 36m }
    Speed: Variable w/ Coordination -¹
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique:
    Hand Seals: 野兔 • 绵羊 • 公鸡 | Yétü • Míanyäng • Gōngjï | Hare • Sheep • Rooster
    Description: The caster charges their natural sources from the center of her abdomen and further into her hands. After weaving the corresponding sigils the charge of the chakra within the hands will fizzle until the nature of lightning emanates from the palms. The lightning shall naturally coat over the hands, bringing the sound of crackling thunder, shining in a sporadic color of violet and deep indigo. The caster will point them at a target, releasing the cluster of lightning toward an adversary. This cluster of lightning energy jumps from the caster's hands and clings towards it's extended target, latching the elemental nature unto and throughout their body. This cannot be avoided by armor, shatters enchantments, and sunders barriers.

    Upon contact, the technique shocks the opponent, as the name implies, sending an electrifying jolt of energy throughout their body. If the constitution of the adversary is below that of B, the jolt spikes throughout the adversaries nervous system, shortening out their synaptic receptors, causing involuntary movement and spasming pains stunning them for a post. Due to the electrical composition, lightning current and exertion of the shock, similar to fire, exposure to such a technique damages the adversary with second-degree burns over their body. By applying upkeep, the adversary will stay stunned. Afterward, This technique inhibits the movement of the adversary, hampering their speed by a tier { ±±± } and coordination with a major disadvantage { ±± } for two turns.
    Weaknesses:~

    * What is this? Coordination minus 1 tier?
    * This is denied. I'm not allowing you to completely ignore armor, enchantments and barriers with this jutsu.
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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by KhaixRoze on Mon Oct 15, 2018 8:44 pm


    身体闪烁 • { 执政官 } | Shēnti Shánshōu • Zhízhèn Güån | Body Flicker Technique • { Archon ~ Arciero }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C | 5
    Upkeep Cost: C | 5
    Range: Shunshin | Body Flicker Technique
    Speed: ±1 Tier
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique: Body Flicker Technique
    Hand Seals: 野兔 | Yétü | Hare
    Description: The caster is able to move in an arc instantaneously with proper custom visual variations; blink and stream of light. This technique is used to get around and behind an opponent without sacrificing multiple Shunshins, streaming around both thier attacks and gaze. Archon Arciero gifts the same boost, thus scales normally along the ascendant Shunshin technique. Provided that the user holds the hand seal for activation, they are allowed to move in a full circle around the adversary.
    Weaknesses:~

    I shifted wording for technique for visuability. Holding the handseal would allow the halo to manifest, however the upkeep can form after the halo, and that's if the caster holds the technique for that long. Altered.

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    闪电颠簸 { 休克 } | Shǎndiànbó • { Xüîkë } | Lightning Jolt Technique • { Shock }
    Rank: B
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: B | 10
    Upkeep Cost: C | 5
    Range: Personal - Close { 0hm -  36m }
    Speed: Variable w/ Coordination -¹
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique:
    Hand Seals: 野兔 •  绵羊 • 公鸡 | Yétü • Míanyäng • Gōngjï  | Hare • Sheep • Rooster
    Description: The caster charges their natural sources from the center of her abdomen and further into her hands. After weaving the corresponding sigils the charge of the chakra within the hands will fizzle until the nature of lightning emanates from the palms. The lightning shall naturally coat over the hands, bringing the sound of crackling thunder, shining in a sporadic color of violet and deep indigo. The caster will point them at a target, releasing the cluster of lightning toward an adversary. This cluster of lightening energy jumps from the caster's hands and clings towards it's extended target, latching the elemental nature unto and throughout their body.

    Upon contact, the technique shocks the opponent, as the name implies, sending an electrifying jolt of energy throughout their body. If the constitution of the adversary is below that of B, the jolt spikes throughout the adversaries nervous system, shortening out there synaptic receptors, causing involuntary movement and spasming pains stunning them for a post. Due to the electrical composition, lightning current and exertion of the shock, similar to fire, exposure to such a technique damages the adversary with second degree burns over their body. By applying upkeep, the adversary will stay stunned. Afterwards, This technique inhibits the movement of the adversary, hampering their speed by a tier { ±±± } and coordination with a major disadvantage { ±± } for two turns.
    Weaknesses:~

    For your first question, yes. I removed the denied portion. Altered.
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    Character Name:
    Léï Zhènyün
    ~ Ijutstu, Ninjutsu, Kuchiyôse, Fuuinjutsu, Chemistry ~
    Ïnazüma; Storm ~ Tempest, Ray, Cloud

    Stats:



    [*]Strength: E
    [*]Constitution: C
    [*]Stamina: B ~ 160
    [*]Speed: S
    [*]Coordination: C
    [*]Intelligence: B
    [*]Perception: C

    Limit Break Points:

    [*]Physical:
    [*]Technique:
    [*]Destiny: 3

    Link to Known Techniques: ~ Medusozoans and Eel Summons, Cloudian Air, Opacity, Railgun, Tempest, Yunigan



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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by Uchiha Akihiro on Mon Oct 15, 2018 8:54 pm

    身体闪烁 • { 执政官 } | Shēnti Shánshōu • Zhízhèn Güån | Body Flicker Technique • { Archon ~ Arciero }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C | 5
    Upkeep Cost: C | 5
    Range: Shunshin | Body Flicker Technique
    Speed: ±1 Tier
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret
    Requirements: Rank B Speed
    Parent Technique: Body Flicker Technique
    Hand Seals: 野兔 | Yétü | Hare
    Description: The caster is able to move in an arc instantaneously with proper custom visual variations; blink and stream of light. This technique is used to get around and behind an opponent without sacrificing multiple Shunshins, streaming around both thier attacks and gaze. Archon Arciero gifts the same boost, thus scales normally along the ascendant Shunshin technique. Provided that the user holds the hand seal for activation, they are allowed to move in a full circle around the adversary.
    Weaknesses:~

    Under the condition that this technique does not allow you to move at instantaneous speed, but at +1 tier base speed, Approved.

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    Shǎndiànbó • { Xüîkë } | Lightning Jolt Technique • { Shock }

    I think a person with D-rank Const and another with C-rank Const would react differently to this.
    The debuffs should be different for each rank. Other than that it's pretty close to approval I'd say.
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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by KhaixRoze on Mon Oct 15, 2018 11:08 pm



    脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: D •°• 3
    Upkeep Cost: D •°• 3
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellect
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ijutstu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: Clan Exclusive; Ïnäzümä
    Parent Technique: ~
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°•  Sheep
    Description: The caster quickly centrates on the chakra along the palm of their hands or in thier mouth. The Chakra Lotus is used by the caster creating an edible Aetheric Source flaring forth a growing chakra lotus which circulates from thier finger tips or tongue, streaming and homing towards the ally or adversary.

    First, The Aetheric Chakra Lotus has the ability to increase the intellect of themselves/ally by a tier advantage { ±±± } or decrease the intellect of the adversary by a major disadvantage { ±± } for two turns before reactivation. Those whom are affected by the Chakra Lotus technique will emanate a shining crystal lotus bulb, beaconing down silver light above thier head which only sensors, those with chakra sight, those whom are affected by the Chakra Lotus Technique and the caster can see.

    Spoiler:

    Weaknesses:

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    閃電蓮花 •°• Shǎndiàn Liánhuā •°• Lightning Lotus { Raihaña }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: D •°• 3
    Upkeep Cost: D •°• 3
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellect
    Element:雷遁[ •°• Rāïton •°• Style of Lightning
    Skill: Ijutstu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: Clan Exclusive; Ïnäzümä
    Parent Technique: 脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: The caster quickly centrates on the chakra along the palm of their hands or in thier mouth. The Lightning Lotus is used by the caster creating a small bang, flaring forth an edible lightning lotus which conducting forth from thier finger tips or tongue, streaming and homing towards the ally or adversary. Upon contact, the sparking lightning lotus discharges, paralyzing the opponent for a turn. Alternatively, the Lightning Lotus technique can be discharged as a conic wave and emanates continuously with cost of upkeep to keep adversary bolted and paralyzed after stunned.

    Aesthethically, a, non lethal version of this technique can be cast for a supplimentary raise in Coordination by a tier {+±+} up 2 turns before reactivation. Those whom are affected by the Lightning Lotus technique will emanate a shining golden lotus bulb above thier head, beaconing down golden light which only sensors, those with chakra sight, those whom are affected by the Lightning Lotus Technique and the caster can see.

    Spoiler:


    Weaknesses:

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    雲蓮花 •°• Yün Liánhuā •°• Cloud Lotus { Yünhaña }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: D •°• 3
    Upkeep Cost: D •°• 3
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellect
    Element:風遁 •°• Fuuton •°• Style of Air
    Skill: Ijutstu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: Clan Exclusive; Ïnäzümä
    Parent Technique: 脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: The caster quickly centrates on the chakra along the palm of their hands or in thier mouth. The Cloud Lotus is used by the caster creating a poffin flaring forth a growing chakra lotus which circulating forth from thier finger tips or mouth, streaming and homing towards the adversary. Upon contact, the has a variety of effects and status raises which can be applied for persona, however caster may choose only one ability while wielding the Cloud Lotus, yet can interchange them prospectively at the beginning of each turn.

    First, The Cloud Lotus has the ability to increase the perception of themselves//ally by tier advantage { ±±± } or decreasing perception of an adversary by major disadvantage { ±± } Those whom are affected by the Cloud Lotus technique will emanate a shining prismatic crystal lotus bulb above thier head, beaconing a sesquaital light which only sensors, those with chakra sight, those whom are affected by the Cloud Lotus Technique and the caster can see.

    Spoiler:


    Weaknesses:

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    云 表現 •°• Yün Bîäōxîän •°• Cloud Manifestion
    Rank: C
    Power: Variable w/ Intellect
    Activation Cost: D | 3
    Upkeep Cost: E | 1
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable w/ Intellect
    Element: 風遁 •°• Fuuton •°• Style of Air
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: KKG Exclusive; Ïnäzümän, Storm Cloud Creation
    Parent Technique: 脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: The caster gathers chakra within thier body and begin to emit the plumes of clouds from eyes, mouth, nostrils, ears, hands and feet. The clouds will pan and drift from the pores of thier body, creating a large mass of fluff around them. Alternatively, the caster can allocate the space around them, in thier range, to manifest clouds within thier distance.
    The clouds naturally grow in size as they move forth from the caster, panning larger akin the range which they travel, absorbing water in the atmosphere as they move forward. The manifestation of casting speed and ability power are on par of the rank of the caster's intellect. The perception of adversaries within the cloud is reduced by a tier, so long as they are within the cloud. Naturally, adversaries are also soaked upon entering and exiting the cloud, covering them with water droplets and keeping them moist. Supplimentarly, if there are clouds which have been previous manifested by the caster, they can utilize the cloud, akin mediums, for the creation of new plumes in appropiation of upkeep.
    Weaknesses:

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    雲暫停 •°• Yún Xuáñgūà •°• Cloud Suspension
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: D •°• 3
    Upkeep Cost: E •°• 1
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellect
    Element: 風遁 •°• Fuuton •°• Style of Air
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: KKG Exclusive; Ïnäzümä, Storm Cloud Creation
    Parent Technique: 云 表現 •°• Yün Bîäōxîän •°• Cloud Manifestion
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: After the caster has generated clouds, they can manuever the clouds, allowing the cloud to carry them up upon a circular platform or covering them partially or wholly in an orb of billowing puffs. While upon, or within, a cloud, the caster is gifted suspension upon the cloud, allowing celeric movement throughout the air. The clouds only move as swift as the rank of intellegence of the caster. The cloud suspension technique also gift the caster an major advantage in speed and a minor advantage in coordination in regards to movement and manuevering while within or on a plume of cloud.
    Weaknesses:

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    Character Name:
    Léï Zhènyün
    ~ Ijutstu, Ninjutsu, Kuchiyôse, Fuuinjutsu, Chemistry ~
    Ïnazüma; Storm ~ Tempest, Ray, Cloud

    Stats:



    [*]Strength: E
    [*]Constitution: C
    [*]Stamina: B ~ 160
    [*]Speed: S
    [*]Coordination: C
    [*]Intelligence: B
    [*]Perception: C

    Limit Break Points:

    [*]Physical:
    [*]Technique:
    [*]Destiny: 3

    Link to Known Techniques: ~ Medusozoans and Eel Summons, Cloudian Air, Opacity, Railgun, Tempest, Yunigan



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    Uchiha Akihiro
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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by Uchiha Akihiro Yesterday at 1:48 pm

    脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Denied. You're not boosting *and* deboosting at D-rank cost. Intellect isn't a stat, Intelligence is.

    電蓮花 •°• Shǎndiàn Liánhuā •°• Lightning Lotus { Raihaña }
    Denied. No generic paralyzation jutsus. You're not using a D-rank power jutsu to paralyze a guy with S-rank const.

    雲蓮花 •°• Yün Liánhuā •°• Cloud Lotus { Yünhaña }
    Denied, same reason as first.

    云 表現 •°• Yün Bîäōxîän •°• Cloud Manifestion
    If you're using water from the atmosphere to create a 30 meters wide cloud, this cloud needs a meter growth per post. Chakra costs are way too low. Not allowing you to maintain a technique that can drop the peception of everyone in the area for 1 stamina point per post. Denied.

    雲暫停 •°• Yún Xuáñgūà •°• Cloud Suspension
    Denied...chakra costs also way too low.
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    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by KhaixRoze Yesterday at 9:21 pm



    脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C •°• 5
    Upkeep Cost: C •°• 5
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellegence
    Element: ~
    Skill: Ijutstu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: Clan Exclusive; Ïnäzümä
    Parent Technique: ~
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°•  Sheep
    Description: The caster quickly centrates on the chakra along the palm of their hands or in thier mouth. The Chakra Lotus is used by the caster creating an edible Aetheric Source flaring forth a glowing chakra lotus which circulates from thier finger tips or tongue, streaming and homing towards the ally or adversary. The Aetheric Chakra Lotus has the ability to increase the intelligence of themselves/ally by a tier advantage { ±±± }. Those whom are affected by the Chakra Lotus technique will emanate a shining crystal lotus bulb, beaconing down silver light above thier head which only sensors, those with chakra sight, those whom are affected by the Chakra Lotus Technique and the caster can see.

    Spoiler:

    Weaknesses:

    Altered Cost and Upkeep

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    閃電蓮花 •°• Shǎndiàn Liánhuā •°• Lightning Lotus { Raihaña }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C •°• 5
    Upkeep Cost: C •°• 5
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellegence
    Element:雷遁[ •°• Rāïton •°• Style of Lightning
    Skill: Ijutstu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: Clan Exclusive; Ïnäzümä
    Parent Technique: 脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: The caster quickly centrates on the chakra along the palm of their hands or in thier mouth. The Lightning Lotus is used by the caster creating a small bang, flaring forth an edible lightning lotus, conducting forth from thier finger tips or tongue, streaming and homing towards the ally or adversary. Upon contact, the sparking lightning lotus discharges, paralyzing the opponent for a turn. Alternatively, the Lightning Lotus technique can be discharged as a conic wave and emanates continuously with cost of upkeep to keep adversary bolted and paralyzed after stunned.

    Aesthethically, a, non lethal version of this technique can be cast for a supplimentary raise in Coordination by a tier {+±+} up 2 turns before reactivation. Those whom are affected by the Lightning Lotus technique will emanate a shining golden lotus bulb above thier head, beaconing down golden light which only sensors, those with chakra sight, those whom are affected by the Lightning Lotus Technique and the caster can see.

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    Weaknesses:Those above the constitution of C are immune to stun.

    Altered Cost and Upkeep

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    雲蓮花 •°• Yün Liánhuā •°• Cloud Lotus { Yünhaña }
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C •°• 5
    Upkeep Cost: C •°• 5
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellegence
    Element:風遁 •°• Fuuton •°• Style of Air
    Skill: Ijutstu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: Clan Exclusive; Ïnäzümä
    Parent Technique: 脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: The caster quickly centrates on the chakra along the palm of their hands or in thier mouth. The Cloud Lotus is used by the caster creating a poffin flaring forth a growing chakra lotus which circulating forth from thier finger tips or mouth, streaming and homing towards the adversary. The Cloud Lotus has the ability to increase the perception of themselves//ally by tier advantage { ±±± }. Those whom are affected by the Cloud Lotus technique will emanate a shining prismatic crystal lotus bulb above thier head, beaconing a sesquaital light which only sensors, those with chakra sight, those whom are affected by the Cloud Lotus Technique and the caster can see.

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    Weaknesses:

    Altered Cost and Upkeep

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    云 表現 •°• Yün Bîäōxîän •°• Cloud Manifestion
    Rank: B
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C •°• 5
    Upkeep Cost: C •°• 5
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable w/ Intellect
    Element: 風遁 •°• Fuuton •°• Style of Air
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary; Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: KKG Exclusive; Ïnäzümän, Storm Cloud Creation
    Parent Technique: 脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: The caster gathers chakra within thier body and begin to emit the plumes of clouds from eyes, mouth, nostrils, ears, hands and feet. The clouds will pan and drift from the pores of thier body, creating a large mass of fluff around them. Alternatively, the caster can allocate the space around them, in thier range, to manifest clouds within thier distance.
    The clouds naturally grow in size 3 meters per rank of intellect of the caster as they move forth from the caster, panning larger akin the range which they travel, absorbing water in the atmosphere as they move forward, each post. The manifestation of casting speed and ability power are on par of the rank of the caster's Intellegence. The perception of adversaries within the cloud is reduced by a major disadvantage { ±± }, so long as they are within the cloud. Naturally, adversaries are also soaked upon entering and exiting the cloud, covering them with water droplets and keeping them moist. Supplimentarly, if there are clouds which have been previous manifested by the caster, they can utilize the cloud, akin mediums, for the creation of new plumes in appropiation of upkeep.
    Weaknesses:

    Altered towards B Rank
    Altered Upkeep
    Added per post growth: grow in size 3 meters per rank of intellect of the caster as they move forth from the caster...per post.
    Altered Tier perception debuff to major advantage.

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    雲暫停 •°• Yún Xuáñgūà •°• Cloud Suspension
    Rank: C
    Power: ~
    Activation Cost: C •°• 5
    Upkeep Cost: D •°• 3
    Range: Personal - Medium [ 0hm - 30m ]
    Speed: Variable with Intellegence
    Element: 風遁 •°• Fuuton •°• Style of Air
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Supplimentary, Secret, Hiden
    Requirements: KKG Exclusive; Ïnäzümä, Storm Cloud Creation
    Parent Technique: 云 表現 •°• Yün Bîäōxîän •°• Cloud Manifestion
    Hand Seals: 羊 •°• Yâng •°• Sheep
    Description: After the caster has generated clouds, they can manuever the fluffs, allowing the cloud to carry them up upon a circular platform or covering them partially or wholly in an orb of billowing puffs. While upon, or within, a cloud, the caster is gifted suspension upon the cloud, allowing celeric movement throughout the air. The clouds only move as swift as the rank of intellegence of the caster. The cloud suspension technique also gift the caster an major advantage { ±± } in speed and a minor advantage { ± } in coordination in regards to movement and manuevering while within or on a plume of cloud.
    Weaknesses:~

    Altered advantages towards C rank.

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    Character Name:
    Léï Zhènyün
    ~ Ijutstu, Ninjutsu, Kuchiyôse, Fuuinjutsu, Chemistry ~
    Ïnazüma; Storm ~ Tempest, Ray, Cloud

    Stats:



    [*]Strength: E
    [*]Constitution: C
    [*]Stamina: B ~ 160
    [*]Speed: S
    [*]Coordination: C
    [*]Intelligence: B
    [*]Perception: C

    Limit Break Points:

    [*]Physical:
    [*]Technique:
    [*]Destiny: 3

    Link to Known Techniques: ~ Medusozoans and Eel Summons, Cloudian Air, Opacity, Railgun, Tempest, Yunigan



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    Uchiha Akihiro
    Chuunin

    Posts : 258
    Join date : 2018-08-06
    Age : 22

    Character File
    Skills & Elements:
    Class: B
    Ryo: a looot

    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by Uchiha Akihiro Today at 11:06 am

    脈輪 蓮花 •°• Maìlún Liánhuā •°• Chakra Lotus Technique { Khaïaña }
    閃電蓮花 •°• Shǎndiàn Liánhuā •°• Lightning Lotus { Raihaña }
    雲蓮花 •°• Yün Liánhuā •°• Cloud Lotus { Yünhaña }

    Needs C-rank upkeep and cost if it boosts a Tier.

    云 表現 •°• Yün Bîäōxîän •°• Cloud Manifestion
    What I meant is you need a growth per post. For example, it grows at 5 meters per post.
    Also techniques which debuff a full tier are generally considered B-rank. Considering this debuffs anyone in the area I would consider this A-rank.
    As such your chakra costs and rank are wrong.


    雲暫停 •°• Yún Xuáñgūà •°• Cloud Suspension
    "The cloud suspension technique also gift the caster an major advantage { ±±± } in speed and a minor advantage { ±± } in coordination in regards to movement and manuevering while within or on a plume of cloud."

    * 3 "+" are a Tier advantage.
    * 2 "+" are a "major" advantage.
    Considering this, this technique should be B-ranked at least and have correspondent chakra costs. I advise you to read the Stat Boosting and Debuffing Rules
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    KhaixRoze
    Jounin

    Posts : 214
    Join date : 2018-08-03
    Location : The Abyss of the Whispers for Eternity

    Character File
    Skills & Elements: Iijutsu, Ninjutsu, Kuchiyôse; Storm
    Class: A
    Ryo: ~

    Re: Eyes of the Tempest

    Post by KhaixRoze Today at 11:40 am

    http://gladiusrp.forumotion.com/t1059p25-eyes-of-the-tempest#11071
    Altered Techniques for Approval.
    I appreciate the Alleviancy.

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    Character Name:
    Léï Zhènyün
    ~ Ijutstu, Ninjutsu, Kuchiyôse, Fuuinjutsu, Chemistry ~
    Ïnazüma; Storm ~ Tempest, Ray, Cloud

    Stats:



    [*]Strength: E
    [*]Constitution: C
    [*]Stamina: B ~ 160
    [*]Speed: S
    [*]Coordination: C
    [*]Intelligence: B
    [*]Perception: C

    Limit Break Points:

    [*]Physical:
    [*]Technique:
    [*]Destiny: 3

    Link to Known Techniques: ~ Medusozoans and Eel Summons, Cloudian Air, Opacity, Railgun, Tempest, Yunigan




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