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    Bryn
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    Post by Bryn Sat Aug 17, 2019 7:17 pm

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    [b]Name:[/b]
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    Name: Happy Surprise!
    Rank: A
    Power: S
    Activation Cost: 75
    Upkeep Cost: N/A
    Range: 30 meter radius for inner ring, 160 total
    Speed: A
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: A tier Stamina
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: Rat-> Tiger-> Dragon
    Description: After weaving the appropriate seals, Bryn channels an enormous amount of Scorch Release chakra into the ground. This influx of energy is volatile and causes the ground around Bryn to erupt upwards as a torrent of Scorch Release chakra explodes out of the earth. This explosion of power is one solid wall of chakra that encompasses the specified range with Bryn as the epicenter, turning all living matter within that range into nothing. The amount of power behind this technique is so great that not even ash remains after it is complete. The wall of Scorch extends into the air seven meters and inflicts a S rank AND an A rank worth of damage at once within the central 30 meter radius. The 30 meters after that has a secondary heat wave comprised, once again, of Scorch Release chakra that deals another S rank amount of damage to those caught within.

    The heat that radiates from the chakra is enough to cause third degree burns to any not caught within the immediate blast zone but who are within 25 meters of it, with every 25 meters after that lowering the degree of burn received, with 100 meters from the blast zone being the safe distance for no chance of harm. Every tier of Constitution above C allows the target to withstand one degree of burns (A tier Constitution would be able to reduce the third degree burns to first degree, for example, and would be safe at 25 meters away from the blast zone). Despite the power behind the attack, its usage is rather simple since it's mainly a massive infusion of chakra that then blows up.

    The attack also causes a massive change in pressure for the surrounding area, causing air currents to swirl like made and altering the atmosphere over two posts. This alteration brings a rainstorm once the attack is completed as the atmosphere attempts to right itself from the massive expansion of heat from Bryn's attack that lasts the rest of the thread.

    Weaknesses: This massive expenditure of chakra staggers even Bryn, giving her a penalty of - to Speed and Coordination for four posts after its usage. She is also unable to use Scorch Release again for another two posts as her body recovers from the chakra dump. The chakra doesn't discriminate either, consuming both friend and foe alike.



    Name: Scorch Slicer
    Rank: B
    Power: B
    Activation Cost: 10
    Upkeep Cost: N/A
    Range: 5 meters
    Speed: A+
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu, Bukijutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: N/A
    Description: Bryn flows Scorch chakra into her weapon, typically a spear, and then makes a vertical slash from the ground to the sky. As she's doing this slash, she releases the pent up chakra to make an arc of Scorch chakra that plows forward at a high speed. The technique uses its chakra up quickly for the burst of speed, having relatively low range when compared to other techniques of its power.
    Weaknesses: N/A


    Name: Heat Shield
    Rank: B
    Power: B
    Activation Cost: 10
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: 15 meters
    Speed: N/A
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: Dragon
    Description: Bryn pulses Scorch release chakra from her skin in powerful waves that repeat many times per second. The chakra creates a series of "zones" around her that do various things depending on which zone one falls under. The area within one meter of her body is treated like it's comprised of concentrated Scorch chakra, incinerating items that of store bought quality or lower and leeching the moisture from any living thing that comes into contact with it which generally results in death.

    The nine meters after this is the "danger zone", an area that is comprised of suffocating heat. Within the danger zone, living tissue begins to dehydrate at an alarming rate, with those who spend a full post within it suffering from third degree burns if they have less than A tier Constitution. A tier increases the duration one can be within it by one post, S by two, and X tier is unaffected. Metals get super heated and begin to melt. Cloth or leather is burned away within this zone, and everybody regardless of Constitution receives a penalty of -- to Speed as their bodies struggle to move in the overbearing heat.

    The final five meters is the "warning zone". Within this zone, cloth is burned away and leather will smoke for a post before bursting into flames as well. Metal takes no damage within this zone, but the air is still very hot and suffocating. Those within this zone suffer a penalty of - to Speed and will receive second degree burns by staying within for longer than one post. Those with B tier Constitution receive second degree burns after three posts, with A tier and above being unaffected.

    Weaknesses: Like most Scorch release techniques, this one does not discriminate from friend or foe. Great care must be taken or the user can kill their own allies.


    Name: Otome no Yari (Spear of the Maiden)
    Rank: A
    Power: A
    Activation Cost: N/A
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: N/A
    Speed: N/A
    Element: N/A
    Skill: Bukijutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: N/A
    Description: Otome no Yari is the fighting style that Bryn has invented over her time as a spear warrior. It's an advanced style that combines aspects from a few different styles she has been taught over her career, taking the best from them all and combining them into an effective killing machine. It is highly focused on quickly killing an opponent which makes it ideal in most situations, including ones where Bryn might be outnumbered. The style utilizes phenomenal footwork that is difficult to emulate and predict, as she is almost constantly moving her feet and remaining agile. Otome no Yari does not fool around with its approach to fighting. Each attack is aimed at maiming or killing an opponent. It maintains a good defense with a focus on parries and evasion over straight up blocks.

    Grants one tier to Coordination when in use, with the odd maneuvers and footwork of the style lowering her opponent's total pool of Precognition Saves by 3.

    Weaknesses: The nature of the style leaves Bryn open more often due to the risks she sometimes takes trying to finish the fight. That makes it hurt all the more when she's actually hit, with her Constitution in regards to damage receiving a penalty of - while Otome no Yari is in use.


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    Post by Uchiha Akihiro Wed Aug 21, 2019 8:26 pm

    Bryn wrote:Name: Happy Surprise!
    Rank: A
    Power: S
    Activation Cost: 75
    Upkeep Cost: N/A
    Range: 30 meter radius for inner ring, 160 total
    Speed: A
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: A tier Stamina
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: Rat-> Tiger-> Dragon
    Description: After weaving the appropriate seals, Bryn channels an enormous amount of Scorch Release chakra into the ground. This influx of energy is volatile and causes the ground around Bryn to erupt upwards as a torrent of Scorch Release chakra explodes out of the earth. This explosion of power is one solid wall of chakra that encompasses the specified range with Bryn as the epicenter, turning all living matter within that range into nothing. The amount of power behind this technique is so great that not even ash remains after it is complete. The wall of Scorch extends into the air seven meters and inflicts a S rank AND an A rank worth of damage at once within the central 30 meter radius. The 30 meters after that has a secondary heat wave comprised, once again, of Scorch Release chakra that deals another S rank amount of damage to those caught within.

    The heat that radiates from the chakra is enough to cause third degree burns to any not caught within the immediate blast zone but who are within 25 meters of it, with every 25 meters after that lowering the degree of burn received, with 100 meters from the blast zone being the safe distance for no chance of harm. Every tier of Constitution above C allows the target to withstand one degree of burns (A tier Constitution would be able to reduce the third degree burns to first degree, for example, and would be safe at 25 meters away from the blast zone). Despite the power behind the attack, its usage is rather simple since it's mainly a massive infusion of chakra that then blows up.

    The attack also causes a massive change in pressure for the surrounding area, causing air currents to swirl like made and altering the atmosphere over two posts. This alteration brings a rainstorm once the attack is completed as the atmosphere attempts to right itself from the massive expansion of heat from Bryn's attack that lasts the rest of the thread.

    Weaknesses: This massive expenditure of chakra staggers even Bryn, giving her a penalty of - to Speed and Coordination for four posts after its usage. She is also unable to use Scorch Release again for another two posts as her body recovers from the chakra dump. The chakra doesn't discriminate either, consuming both friend and foe alike.

    This is denied. The ability to cause eruptions as described requires Earth Release and is under the influence of Yõton, Lava Release.

    Bryn wrote:Name: Otome no Yari (Spear of the Maiden)
    Rank: A
    Power: A
    Activation Cost: N/A
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: N/A
    Speed: N/A
    Element: N/A
    Skill: Bukijutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: N/A
    Description: Otome no Yari is the fighting style that Bryn has invented over her time as a spear warrior. It's an advanced style that combines aspects from a few different styles she has been taught over her career, taking the best from them all and combining them into an effective killing machine. It is highly focused on quickly killing an opponent which makes it ideal in most situations, including ones where Bryn might be outnumbered. The style utilizes phenomenal footwork that is difficult to emulate and predict, as she is almost constantly moving her feet and remaining agile. Otome no Yari does not fool around with its approach to fighting. Each attack is aimed at maiming or killing an opponent. It maintains a good defense with a focus on parries and evasion over straight up blocks.

    Grants one tier to Coordination when in use, with the odd maneuvers and footwork of the style lowering her opponent's total pool of Precognition Saves by 3.

    Weaknesses: The nature of the style leaves Bryn open more often due to the risks she sometimes takes trying to finish the fight. That makes it hurt all the more when she's actually hit, with her Constitution in regards to damage receiving a penalty of - while Otome no Yari is in use.
    This is also denied.
    We don't allow jutsus to debuff Precog counts. If you want to lower your opponent's number of precogs, you have to debuff Int.

    Bryn wrote:Name: Scorch Slicer
    Rank: B
    Power: B
    Activation Cost: 10
    Upkeep Cost: N/A
    Range: 5 meters
    Speed: A+
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu, Bukijutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: N/A
    Description: Bryn flows Scorch chakra into her weapon, typically a spear, and then makes a vertical slash from the ground to the sky. As she's doing this slash, she releases the pent up chakra to make an arc of Scorch chakra that plows forward at a high speed. The technique uses its chakra up quickly for the burst of speed, having relatively low range when compared to other techniques of its power.
    Weaknesses: N/A

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    Bryn wrote:Name: Heat Shield
    Rank: B
    Power: B
    Activation Cost: 10
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: 15 meters
    Speed: N/A
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: Dragon
    Description: Bryn pulses Scorch release chakra from her skin in powerful waves that repeat many times per second. The chakra creates a series of "zones" around her that do various things depending on which zone one falls under. The area within one meter of her body is treated like it's comprised of concentrated Scorch chakra, incinerating items that of store bought quality or lower and leeching the moisture from any living thing that comes into contact with it which generally results in death.

    The nine meters after this is the "danger zone", an area that is comprised of suffocating heat. Within the danger zone, living tissue begins to dehydrate at an alarming rate, with those who spend a full post within it suffering from third degree burns if they have less than A tier Constitution. A tier increases the duration one can be within it by one post, S by two, and X tier is unaffected. Metals get super heated and begin to melt. Cloth or leather is burned away within this zone, and everybody regardless of Constitution receives a penalty of -- to Speed as their bodies struggle to move in the overbearing heat.

    The final five meters is the "warning zone". Within this zone, cloth is burned away and leather will smoke for a post before bursting into flames as well. Metal takes no damage within this zone, but the air is still very hot and suffocating. Those within this zone suffer a penalty of - to Speed and will receive second degree burns by staying within for longer than one post. Those with B tier Constitution receive second degree burns after three posts, with A tier and above being unaffected.

    Weaknesses: Like most Scorch release techniques, this one does not discriminate from friend or foe. Great care must be taken or the user can kill their own allies.

    If your jutsu has B-rank power, it can deal with B-ranked quality and below. And it deals B-ranked damage at most.
    Also this needs more balancing, as it seems to be from the way it is worded that you can automatically burn anyone within 10 meters with 1 hand-seal, since the technique doesn't have any "speed".


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    Post by Akame Thu Aug 22, 2019 7:07 pm

    Happy Surprise!- You don't need Earth release to blow up dirt. I'm not manipulating the earth in any way, shape, or form and the explosion is caused by the massive influx of chakra. Lava Release also does not have a monopoly on causing the ground to explode, and if it does then katon and suiton just got a really heavy nerf. Could you please elaborate on HOW this infringes on Earth release and Lava release, please?


    Otome- Would it be acceptable to make it so that an opponent can only use 1 precog against the style every two posts rather than every single post? That wouldn't debuff their total amount, just the speed at which they can apply them to this particular style.


    Heat Shield- It doesn't have a speed because this is a constant zone of pressure that Bryn keeps up around her. I also purposefully made its effects against items weaker due to its effects on people, which requires people to remain within a zone for a FULL post. I thought of the instant burning and tried to prevent that already within the technique. Them simply being within the zone for a bit won't damage them, but if they remain in the zone for a full post and Bryn gets to post again they will burn. As to the one meter area around her... well, that's what Scorch does. It kills people, quickly. If someone tries to punch Bryn unprotected then that's their fault, really, though I wouldn't have a problem putting a one post delay on that part of the jutsu to prevent any worries about somehow one-shotting people should that get it to the approved status.


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    Post by Bryn Fri Aug 23, 2019 5:36 pm


    Name: Happy Surprise!
    Rank: A
    Power: S
    Activation Cost: 90
    Upkeep Cost: N/A
    Range: 30 meter radius for inner ring, 160 total
    Speed: S
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: A tier Stamina
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: Rat-> Tiger-> Dragon-> Monkey-> Dog-> Tiger-> Dragon
    Description: After weaving the appropriate seals, Bryn channels an enormous amount of Scorch Release chakra within herself. She then releases this pent up chakra in one shot, causing a massive eruption of Scorch release chakra into the area around her. The force and heat behind the chakra is enough that a crater dozens of meters in diameter and ten meters deep appears once the technique is complete. This explosion of power is one solid wall of chakra that encompasses the specified range with Bryn as the epicenter, turning all living matter within that range into nothing. The amount of power behind this technique is so great that not even ash remains after it is complete. The wall of Scorch extends into the air seven meters and inflicts a S rank AND an A rank worth of damage at once within the central 30 meter radius. The 30 meters after that has a secondary heat wave comprised, once again, of Scorch Release chakra that deals another S rank amount of damage to those caught within.

    The heat that radiates from the chakra is enough to cause third degree burns to any not caught within the immediate blast zone but who are within 25 meters of it, with every 25 meters after that lowering the degree of burn received, with 100 meters from the blast zone being the safe distance for no chance of harm. Every tier of Constitution above C allows the target to withstand one degree of burns (A tier Constitution would be able to reduce the third degree burns to first degree, for example, and would be safe at 25 meters away from the blast zone). Despite the power behind the attack, its usage is rather simple since it's mainly a massive infusion of chakra that then blows up.

    The attack also causes a massive change in pressure for the surrounding area, causing air currents to swirl like made and altering the atmosphere over two posts. This alteration brings a rainstorm once the attack is completed as the atmosphere attempts to right itself from the massive expansion of heat from Bryn's attack that lasts the rest of the thread.

    Weaknesses: This massive expenditure of chakra staggers even Bryn, giving her a penalty of - to Speed and Coordination for four posts after its usage. She is also unable to use Scorch Release again for another two posts as her body recovers from the chakra dump. The chakra doesn't discriminate either, consuming both friend and foe alike.


    Name: Heat Shield
    Rank: B
    Power: B
    Activation Cost: 10
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: 15 meters
    Speed: N/A
    Element: Scorch
    Skill: Ninjutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: Dragon-> Rat-> Boar-> Rat-> Dragon
    Description: Bryn pulses Scorch release chakra from her skin in powerful waves that repeat many times per second. The chakra creates a series of "zones" around her that do various things depending on which zone one falls under. The area within one meter of her body is treated like it's comprised of concentrated Scorch chakra, incinerating items that of store bought quality or lower and leeching the moisture from any living thing that comes into contact with it which generally results in death.

    The nine meters after this is the "danger zone", an area that is comprised of suffocating heat. Within the danger zone, living tissue begins to dehydrate at an alarming rate, with those who spend a full post within it suffering from third degree burns if they have less than A tier Constitution. A tier increases the duration one can be within it by one post, S by two, and X tier is unaffected. Metals get super heated and begin to melt. Cloth or leather is burned away within this zone, and everybody regardless of Constitution receives a penalty of -- to Speed as their bodies struggle to move in the overbearing heat.

    The final five meters is the "warning zone". Within this zone, cloth is burned away and leather will smoke for a post before bursting into flames as well. Metal takes no damage within this zone, but the air is still very hot and suffocating. Those within this zone suffer a penalty of - to Speed and will receive second degree burns by staying within for longer than one post. Those with B tier Constitution receive second degree burns after three posts, with A tier and above being unaffected.

    Weaknesses: Like most Scorch release techniques, this one does not discriminate from friend or foe. Great care must be taken or the user can kill their own allies.


    Name: Otome no Yari (Spear of the Maiden)
    Rank: A
    Power: A
    Activation Cost: N/A
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: N/A
    Speed: N/A
    Element: N/A
    Skill: Bukijutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: N/A
    Description: Otome no Yari is the fighting style that Bryn has invented over her time as a spear warrior. It's an advanced style that combines aspects from a few different styles she has been taught over her career, taking the best from them all and combining them into an effective killing machine. It is highly focused on quickly killing an opponent which makes it ideal in most situations, including ones where Bryn might be outnumbered. The style utilizes phenomenal footwork that is difficult to emulate and predict, as she is almost constantly moving her feet and remaining agile. Otome no Yari does not fool around with its approach to fighting. Each attack is aimed at maiming or killing an opponent. It maintains a good defense with a focus on parries and evasion over straight up blocks.

    Grants one tier to Coordination when in use, with the odd maneuvers and footwork of the style lowering her opponent's Intelligence by one minus.

    Weaknesses: N/A



    Made edits in red. For Otome no Yari, since the upkeep she is paying is enough for the boost and debuff that's in there now, I removed the weakness. For Happy Surprise I removed the parts about the earth blowing up and just made it an explosion of chakra. I also increased the cost, since the power of the technique still worried people, and added handseals to it to make it take longer to use. Added handseals to Heat Shield.


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    Post by Kitsuki Kurahasa Sat Sep 14, 2019 11:31 pm

    Bryn wrote:
    Name: Otome no Yari (Spear of the Maiden)
    Rank: A
    Power: A
    Activation Cost: N/A
    Upkeep Cost: 5
    Range: N/A
    Speed: N/A
    Element: N/A
    Skill: Bukijutsu
    Classification: Personal
    Requirements: N/A
    Parent Technique: N/A
    Hand Seals: N/A
    Description: Otome no Yari is the fighting style that Bryn has invented over her time as a spear warrior. It's an advanced style that combines aspects from a few different styles she has been taught over her career, taking the best from them all and combining them into an effective killing machine. It is highly focused on quickly killing an opponent which makes it ideal in most situations, including ones where Bryn might be outnumbered. The style utilizes phenomenal footwork that is difficult to emulate and predict, as she is almost constantly moving her feet and remaining agile. Otome no Yari does not fool around with its approach to fighting. Each attack is aimed at maiming or killing an opponent. It maintains a good defense with a focus on parries and evasion over straight up blocks.

    Grants one tier to Coordination when in use, with the odd maneuvers and footwork of the style lowering her opponent's Intelligence by one minus.

    Weaknesses: N/A

    Approved.


    Happy Surprise - Make this a Scorch Clan Exclusive. I wouldn't allow it as a Personal technique as generally we don't want people stacking multiple ranks of damage into a single technique (irrespective of cost). The creation of such mega-techniques is a rare thing but I'd allow this as being one of the Fujio clan's upper level techs. The sort that only the clan leader would know.


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