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    Post by Fenrir Sat Sep 23, 2017 2:22 pm

    Name:Fenrir
    Age:19
    Gender:Male
    Village:Konohagakure
    Rank:Jounin
    Title:N/A

    Clan:Uchiha
    Bloodline:Sharingan (2 Tomoe) 1500 Exp
    Element(s):Fire, Water, Lightning
    Skill(s):
    Taijutsu
    Ninjutsu
    Fire
    Water
    Lightning

    Stats

    • Strength: B
    • Constitution: D
    • Stamina: C
    • Speed: B
    • Coordination: C
    • Intelligence: C
    • Perception: C


    EXPERIENCE
    +3000 (Jounin)
    +1050 (Base)
    +1500 (Unique Ability)
    -3850 (Stats)
    -1500 (Sharingan, 2 Tomoe)
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    200/4500

    Unique Abilities:
    -Competetive Edge- The time Fenrir spent fiercely competing with his teammate gave him a nice little boost to his abilities, with him advancing his skills faster than the others of his rank.  He doesn't grow as quickly as he used to since, try as he might, he isn't used to training alone.  This gives him an extra 1500 Experience at creation but gives him a debt of 2,250 experience.  Half of all experience gained goes to this debt until it has been paid.

    -Survivor- Years spent on the run from his own clan have trained Fenrir's body to react more quickly to danger.  This has made it easier for him to react to enemies quickly, adding one tier to his Speed and Coordination when active.  Unfortunately, this burst of speed comes at a cost, lowering his Stamina and Strength by 1 tier while in use.  The maximum possible boost for this ability is A Rank.

    -Betrayed- Fenrir's heart was broken when his best friend and clanmate Ryuuki attempted to kill him.  This has led to a severe lack of trust in his fellow ninja, considering his only ally to be the one he follows.  Due to this, teamwork is difficult for him, and when forced to work as part of a team, he receives a Perception debuff of one tier, a part of his focus being attached to his teammates at all times to ensure they won't betray him.  As a bonus, when working alone or with his leader, he receives a bonus of 1 tier to his Perception, more intently focused on his task without the distraction of traitors.  The maximum possible boost from this ability is A-Rank.

    Appearance: Fenrir is tall, but not quite the tallest by Shinobi standards, standing at 6 feet and two inches.  He is also well built, with a clear amount of muscle covering his body, but not quite bulky.  This build is well maintained, with little to no signs of muscle loss or fat gain.  This could be because of his job as a ninja, his time running from his clan, or from his simple lack of eating.

    Fenrir's hair, previously neat and orderly, has become wild and untamed.  After his escape, he stopped styling it, and after he arrived in his new home, he decided to simply keep it that way.  Now it goes down to his shoulders, snow white and messy.  He wears a thin-layered shirt, long sleeved and with pants to match.  When he does wear shoes, he wears a simple and forgettable pair of black running shoes, fitted to his feet without laces.  Most of the time he will have a black cloak with a hood, just large enough to cover his entire body when necessary.  He keeps his pouches attached to his vest (black of course), on the sides and front for easy access.  Other than this, he sometimes wears a black mask to cover the bottom half of his face, and a black beanie to hold back his distinctive hair.

    His face could be seen as handsome if it didn't always have such a cold look.  Little to no emotion can ever be discerned from his face, except for a small amount of hate let out by his eyes, bright blue until he activates his Sharingan.  It has been years since anyone has seen the soft face of the happy child he once was, and it's unlikely it will ever be seen again, buried under years of hatred.

    Fenrir has only one noticeable scar, running from the left side of his forehead down to his chin, a reminder of a rather uncomfortable encounter with a rather sharp katana.  Apart from this, all of his scars are normally covered by his clothing, but when they are seen, the most prominent are the ones on his chest and back.  On his chest, a large, uneven X marks where he was slashed by duel daggers, and on his back are the many scars from a painful lashing session with the whip of one he would once have called friend.  Other than this, he has no lasting marks.

    History: Of all the enemies Fenrir has made, the worst was met at birth, born in the very room that he was.  That enemy was his best friend, Ryuuki Uchiha, also his clanmate and destined partner. The two were born to be friends and partners, as their fathers once were in the past.  And so they grew together, they trained together, and they lived together in the house of Fenrir's parents, due to Ryuuki's mother dying during childbirth.  Unfortunately, Ryuuki's father had died shortly before his birth on a mission, and while the clan supported his mother during her pregnancy, it had fallen solely to Fenrir's family to raise her child.  While they considered each other to be as brothers, the parents did not, and while they treated them equally, and punished them equally, eventually Ryuuki realized the truth.  After he brought this reality to Fenrir, they swore to always act as brothers and to never let anything get in the way of that.

    As they grew, the two Uchiha were shown to be quite talented, quickly surpassing others of their age.  Fenrir showed that he had a remarkable talent for physical combat, and Ryuuki had sharp senses and a sharper mind.  Eventually, they grew to such a point that their own clanmates, those who had grown with them for so many years, had become jealous.  They refused to allow someone to be so much greater than them, members of a noble clan.  Little did they know, the two boys were much better than them.  Even when they attempted to ambush them in groups of 4 or 5, the two would always work together to beat them back.  One day, however, Fenrir found that it was much more difficult to fight alone than when he had a friend there to have his back.  While he was defending against a fellow Uchiha, a couple years older than himself, and he was winning.  As of yet, no one had actually tried to kill him, and he wasn't ready when the enemy drew two kunai and tried to slash them both through his chest.  While Fenrir never learned if the boy intended to actually kill him or simply wound him, he did learn one thing: No one fights with honor.  And so, enraged by the attempt on his life, Fenrir charged the boy, beating him into the ground until he eventually passed out from blood loss.  Upon awakening, he found that he was in a hospital, the boy he had fought in a bed next to him, and Ryuuki standing over him.  From then on, Ryuuki was the only one that he ever trusted.

    Soon, the two Uchiha found themselves becoming Genin and being assigned to a team together, along with a third member.  This member was clanless, considered lesser than these two of a noble clan, and her name was Arisaka.  While at first, the two Uchiha at first believed that she was lesser than them due to her lack of a noble name, they were soon proven wrong, as she was, in fact, their equal, if not their better.  Unfortunately, she had a strange knack for Genjutsu that put her above the other two in one on one fights, and while Fenrir was rather skilled, he had yet to unlock the Sharingan, and while Ryuuki had a Sharingan, he was not particularly skilled in comparison to his compatriot.  And so, with time, they began to all regard each other as equals and friends.

    Soon after, that friendship grew, and Arisaka became more of a love interest to the two, both competing in various ways for her affection.  This began with simple competitions and a small rivalry during training sessions.  They would compete to see who was faster, or who could knock down a tree using this technique, things like that, Fenrir would win.  They also had competitions with riddles and puzzles.  These competitions, Ryuuki would win.  This caused them to grow in power quite rapidly and was supported by their superiors.  It went like this back and forth, slowly growing into more daring competitions and a more fierce rivalry, until eventually, it became dangerous.  They would have arguments as to who was better, usually ending with shouting and sometimes fighting.  Eventually, their sensei decided to step in and put a stop to all this nonsense.  That was where it ended, or so their sensei thought.

    One day, while out on a mission, Fenrir's team was ambushed by a group of bandits while Fenrir and Ryuuki were fighting.  While they fought hard, they were eventually beaten and had no choice but to retreat.  Unfortunately, both Arisaka and Ryuuki had been wounded, and Fenrir had barely gotten them away.  It soon became clear that he would need to make a choice, and while Ryuuki was unconscious, Ariasaka wasn't.  Fenrir refused to believe that he couldn't save them both, and Arisaka refused to let him save her, instead pleading that he take Ryuuki with him back to the village, assuring him that she would be able to make it on her own.  Eventually, Fenrir realized that she was right and that it would be impossible for him to force her to go.  So, Fenrir left Ari behind and carried Ryuuki back to the village alone.  Upon his arrival, he discovered that he had somehow forgotten about the Chuunin exams in the day's events.  For some reason, when he was told about this, he didn't seem to notice nor care, his eyes simply remaining glazed over by a layer of detachment.  The next day, he found that his Sharingan at awakened during the day's events, and he had somehow failed to notice.

    They had no real chance to speak before the Exams began, spending most of their time recovering from that day, and Fenrir found that it was almost impossible for him to find his friend in between the Exams, as if he was avoiding him.  The Chuunin Exams were difficult for most, but Fenrir and Ryuuki had been greatly prepared for it and made it to the end mostly unscathed.  In an unfortunate twist of fate, they found themselves paired against each other in the final round of the Exams, a simple battle between pairs.  Believing that they were to fight as friends and brothers, the way they always had, Fenrir began the fight by reaching his hand out to meet Ryuuki's.  He was greatly surprised when he was greeted by a slash from his so-called brother's katana, drawn and slashed in one quick motion.  All he could hear over the roaring of the Uchiha in the crowd, outraged by this dishonorable tactic that had been used by one of their best and brightest was Ryuuki's voice.  You let her die.  This broke something inside of Fenrir that he never knew the pain of having broken, his heart.  It also sparked something inside of him, something he had never felt: Absolute Hatred.  This, combined with the heartbreak that his once friend had caused, caused him to activate his Sharingan, and set his fists to begin flying.  They both knew that Fenrir was the superior fighter, and with a rage burning brighter than the sun, Ryuuki was no match for him.  He continued striking him, over and over until his face was covered with blood, until eventually, he blacked out, the last memory of the day being himself getting pulled off of his bloody and broken opponent.

    From this day, Fenrir swore off the name Uchiha, claiming his Sharingan as his own, refusing to even speak to any members of his clan.  It was believed that he didn't attend his parents funeral, but even though he tried not to, he still found himself watching from atop a building in the Uchiha complex, undetected except by those who respected his loss enough to ignore his presence. Fenrir trained alone, he ate alone, and he spoke alone.  The only people he would interact with were those who gave his missions and those he targeted during them.  Upon approaching him, people would quickly be turned away either by his cold look or his hatred, almost tangible in the air around him.  His clanmates betrayed him, his love was dead, and his best friend blamed him for it.  There was nothing to live for anymore but his hatred, and so that was what he clung to.  Eventually, through completion of missions and his training, he was selected as a potential candidate for becoming a Jounin.  This came with a set of trials, most of which involved the skills of a ninja that he had spent his life developing, and he passed them all, albeit with some difficulty.  His new rank came with new responsibilities and new comrades, none of which he liked, and all of which he dealt with.  Using this rank, he did manage to uncover some news about his past life.  Apparently, Ryuuki had left the village after the Chuunin exams, becoming a Missing Ninja.  Whether this was out of spite or from the same emptiness Fenrir himself now felt was unknown.  What was known was that he was a criminal, and if Fenrir met him again, there would be no one to pull him away, and one of them would die.

    Personality:  Where there was once a happy child, there is now only a cold shell holding a hateful soul.  Fenrir lives only in half, as where most have family and love, he has nothing but the flames of his hatred to keep him warm.  There is only one person he cares about anymore, and it's not out of love.  He serves his leader, only because it is all that is left.  He was a ninja, an Uchiha, and a brother, and now that he has lost two, he clings to the one he has left.  As a ninja, it is his duty to serve his leader to the best of his ability, performing the missions assigned to him and guarding the village whenever he isn't training.  Apart from this, he does nothing.

    Inside his mind, however, Fenrir is fighting a constant battle.  He has voices, the incarnations of those who were most important to him, constantly battling inside to wrestle control of his mind from him, wanting him to go where they wish to go, wanting him to do what they wished to when he knew them.  These are mere shadows of their real-world counterparts, and only push towards what Fenrir believes they would.  They include the shadow of the Brother, the shadow of the Love, the shadow of the Heart, and the shadow of the Blade.  They push and pull inside of him constantly, making him fear that if he did anything to give one more pull than the others, then he would be fully taken by them, and they would control him until there was nothing left of him to control.

    When he is forced to interact with other people for missions, he tends to be slightly more unstable, with the voices pushes and pulls being much stronger than in the serenity of loneliness.  Here he will exhibit more emotion, and his words and movements will be more passionate.  He can change from depressed to angry to happy on a dime, all depending on his environment and which voice is being stimulated the most by it.  This results in most people avoiding him for fear of him suddenly turning on them, either for mad pleasure or because he believes they are traitors, which he has a terrible hatred of since the incident at the Chuunin exams.

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    Post by Akame Sat Sep 23, 2017 6:21 pm

    Alright, welcome to the site! First thing, you have too many skill points being used for a jonin ranked character. Jonin begin with six skill points that can be used for skills, elements, and in your case the Uchiha bloodline costs one which leaves you with five maximum skills. Currently, you have six chosen.




    Competetive Edge- The time Fenrir spent fiercely competing with his teammate gave him a nice little boost to his abilities, with him advancing his skills faster than the others of his rank. He doesn't grow as quickly as he used to since, try as he might, he isn't used to training alone. This gives him an extra 2000 Experience at creation, but gives him a debt of 3000 experience.

    2,000 experience is enough to bring you to an A tier shinobi, which is one tier above the starting rank of a registered jonin. You're going to have to reduce this number to below 2,000 and change your flaw too. What you have unlocked via experience will need to be changed too with this reduced total. I'd recommend making it so that half of all experience gained goes into paying back the amount of bonus starting experience plus an additional 50%. If you chose 1500 for example, you'd need to gain enough experience to pay back 2,250 before the experience gain became normalized again.


    Your second Unique Ability just needs a note in there that the maximum possible boost with this is A, meaning you can't go from A to S with that ability since S rank costs two stat raises to gain through normal means. You can go ahead and make your Perception buff one tier, but you'll need to add this same note for that UA as well.


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    Post by Fenrir Sat Sep 23, 2017 6:52 pm

    I believe it is fixed


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    Post by Akame Sat Sep 23, 2017 7:00 pm

    Approved!


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