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 Akuma's Free three Jutsu Custom

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Sithis



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Join date : 2017-11-08
Age : 23

PostSubject: Akuma's Free three Jutsu Custom   Wed Nov 15, 2017 6:53 am

Name: Thunder Release Armor
Rank: S
Power: S
Activation Cost: N/A
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: S
Element: Raiton
Skill: S
Classification: Taught by Akuma only
Requirements: Ninjutsu, Taijutsu, S Rank Speed
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Allows the User to call Forth Thunder from the sky any where coating themselves with Chakra and Thunder chakra which radiates from Raiton. Granting the User Five Grades To Their Strength, Coordination, and Stamina. Caps at S.
Weaknesses: You need S Rank Pecr. To use this skill at max with S Rank Speed to maximization the power of this Jutsu. If you don't have that you have a lesser version of this Technique.


Name: Thunder Release Super Dragon Roar
Rank: S
Power: S
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: Zero
Range:500
Speed: S Rank
Element: Raiton
Skill:Ninjutsu, Raiton
Classification: Must be taught by Akuma
Requirements: Ninjutsu
Parent Technique: Thunder Release Armor
Hand Seals: None comes from the mouth
Description: The user summons Thunder from the sky towards his mouth and lungs, and Releases a Massive beam of Thunder in a form of a Dragon That is 50x50 meters girth thickness.
Weaknesses: Leaves the target open for an attack since you can't dodge while the beam is going, However, you can move your body slowly to change the direction of the attack it is heading,

Name: Tae Kwon Do(Style)
Rank:n/A?
Power: Varies on the Users
Activation Cost: n/A
Upkeep Cost: n/A
Range: Self/Close
Speed: Varies on the users
Element: n/A
Skill: Varies
Classification: Must be taught by Akuma
Requirements: Taijutsu.
Parent Technique: n/A
Hand Seals: n/a
Description: User becomes a master of Taekwondo. ANd Knows all forms, and Techniques from it.
Weaknesses: It's a Kicking style. But uses 5% Of hand movement, and takedowns. It's 95% Kicks.
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Join date : 2016-12-15

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PostSubject: Re: Akuma's Free three Jutsu Custom   Thu Nov 16, 2017 10:33 pm

@Sithis wrote:
Name: Thunder Release Armor
Rank: S
Power: S
Activation Cost: N/A
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: S
Element: Raiton
Skill: S
Classification: Taught by Akuma only
Requirements: Ninjutsu, Taijutsu, S Rank Speed
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Allows the User to call Forth Thunder from the sky any where coating themselves with Chakra and Thunder chakra which radiates from Raiton. Granting the User Five Grades To Their Strength, Coordination, and Stamina. Caps at S.
Weaknesses: You need S Rank Pecr. To use this skill at max with S Rank Speed to maximization the power of this Jutsu. If you don't have that you have a lesser version of this Technique.


First and foremost, you're not getting any type of boost for free. S rank power means S rank activation for a Ninjutsu technique, we'll talk about the upkeep later. The "Skill" field is not another place to put the rank of the technique either, this is where you would put "Ninjutsu" if it was a Ninjutsu or "Taijutsu" if it was a Taijutsu technique. With that, you can also remove Ninjutsu from the requirements section since Ninjutsu will already be listed under the "Skill" field. For the Classification field of your technique, this refers to whether it's a private technique or not. If it is, put "personal" in that field. If it's an open technique, you'd put "open". If it's a village technique it would be "*insert Village name here* Exclusive". This holds true for all of your techniques, and will need to be changed for all of them.

When describing boosts, please use either "+,-" or "plus and minus" when describing what a technique does. If it grants 3 pluses or minuses, it is counted as one tier. This also applies to all techniques. Calling thunder out of the sky also indicates some sort of cloudy sky being necessary, as thunder doesn't come from a blue sky.

The weaknesses are also a bit oddly described. Are you saying you need to have S tier perception to use this technique at full power? If so, you need to describe in the description what your boosts become if you don't have S tier Perception.

My final concern is that this looks to be a ripoff of Lightning Release Chakra Mode, which is a Kumogakure Exclusive technique. Once the edits have been made, I'll be better able to tell if that's true or not.

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Name: Thunder Release Super Dragon Roar
Rank: S
Power: S
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: Zero
Range:500
Speed: S Rank
Element: Raiton
Skill:Ninjutsu, Raiton
Classification: Must be taught by Akuma
Requirements: Ninjutsu
Parent Technique: Thunder Release Armor
Hand Seals: None comes from the mouth
Description: The user summons Thunder from the sky towards his mouth and lungs, and Releases a Massive beam of Thunder in a form of a Dragon That is 50x50 meters girth thickness.
Weaknesses: Leaves the target open for an attack since you can't dodge while the beam is going, However, you can move your body slowly to change the direction of the attack it is heading,

For the range, is that 500 meters? 500 feet? 500 centimeters? I need a label here to know for sure what the limits you want are. Under skill, you do not need to put Raiton. Raiton being listed in the "Element" field is enough. The Ninjutsu skill does not need re-listed in the "Requirements" field either.

The major issue with this is that you want this dragon to cover what I'm assuming is 500 meters while making that dragon 50 meters wide and costing a B rank amount of stamina. I'm going to be blunt here; that isn't going to happen. If you want this to have a range of that distance, it's going to need a S rank activation cost minimum, and the dragon would need to be no larger than 3 meters in diameter.

It will also need to fire in a straight line, none of this turning the head to change the direction business. 500 meters at S tier speed happens in only a little more time than it takes to type the word "ramen", so it's a very powerful technique just with that range alone. As with the previous technique, calling Thunder from the sky indicates a prerequisite of a cloudy sky.


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Name: Tae Kwon Do(Style)
Rank:n/A?
Power: Varies on the Users
Activation Cost: n/A
Upkeep Cost: n/A
Range: Self/Close
Speed: Varies on the users
Element: n/A
Skill: Varies
Classification: Must be taught by Akuma
Requirements: Taijutsu.
Parent Technique: n/A
Hand Seals: n/a
Description: User becomes a master of Taekwondo. ANd Knows all forms, and Techniques from it.
Weaknesses: It's a Kicking style. But uses 5% Of hand movement, and takedowns. It's 95% Kicks.

So for this, I'm going to need you to describe what Taekwondo is better than two sentences worth of description. What is taught? How does the style approach combat? Is it defensive? Etc and so on. Also, does this provide any kind of statistical bonus? Every style on the site currently provides some sort of bonus, though if you do this it will require an upkeep equal to one rank below the power of the technique.

For the actual filling out of the fields for this, there are numerous things that need fixed. Rank will need to be added, as this determines the word count for training the technique as well as who is capable of learning it. Power will need to be changed to a solid rank as well, and this is what determines the level of boost you may receive. For a baseline, C rank power styles grant up to 3 pluses worth of boosts. As you go up or down in rank, add or subtract that many pluses to get your maximum boost at that rank without adding additional drawbacks.

For Speed just put N/A. The style itself does not have a speed, which is what this field is intended for. Taijutsu will need to be put in for the Skill field and taken out of Requirements. Classification will need changed as I noted in your previous techniques.

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