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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Fri Aug 31, 2018 1:19 pm

    Name: Tsubasa Tsumori
    Age: 8
    Gender: Male
    Village: Kirigakure
    Rank:  Genin
    Title: Minamoto-No-Raikou

    Clan: Nature Clan
    Bloodline: Sage Transformation
    Element(s): -
    Skill(s): Ninjutsu

    EXP Expenditure:


    Stats

    • Strength: C
    • Constitution: D
    • Stamina: C
    • Speed: C
    • Coordination: D
    • Intelligence: C
    • Perception: D


    Unique Abilities:

    Nature Boy: Due to everything that Tsubasa has been through in the past he has quite a bit more experience than one would expect from someone of his age and rank. This takes the form of 499 exp boost during creation, all of which must be paid back.




    Appearance:

    Tsubasa stands at 4'9 and weighs in at 100 lbs. Under any normal circumstance he is always seen with his hair down where it falls below his neck and stops just at the beginning  of his attire. While his hair is short and messy, the golden locks often find themselves curling up especially around the right side of his face, where his often has little tufts of hair sticking out. His eyes are a soft red color, and lower facial region is always covered by the sides of his collar.Moving on to his clothing, if he ever out and about he often wears this. Starting with the top he wears a tattered shirt underneath a white cloak.

    Moving onto the lower portion of his body he wears a pair of black pants which are held up by a single red sash. Attached to the golden buckle with holds the sash against the pants rests an ash grey and black pelt which drops just to the bells of his pants and rest comfortably against his sandals.In a situation that requires him to be properly dressed and ready his appearance changes. He wears a white mandarin collared sleeveless shirt, worn over by a black sleeveless stand up collared jacket. The bottom half consists of white pants wrapped around by a sarong and tied with an abrasive belt. Along the length of his nose lies his birthmark which to some look like a small scar. The jagged line starts from one side of his nose to the other much like the scar his father had. The scar currently sits under bandages that cover his face

    History:

    With his births unknown, Tsubasa's first breaths were not inside of a settlements hospital nor were they among the walls of a home. The first breaths and first sights of this illegitimate child were in a cavern far from his home and the family that probably never knew he existed. Held by those he embedded as his "family" he grew up with no mention of his family. As he lived with this group he was often on the run with the two of them, the mother and father hiding from someone or something for the longest time. At the age of six, the young male watched as his family was torn from him, an emotionless child who had yet to understand he had nothing in this world. For some reason the ninja took pity upon the child and took him with them back to the compound where he had been raised by them for some time before being put up for adoption.

    Personality:

    Tsubasa is very soft spoken and quite child who likes to stay away from people, due to his early upbringing and never really being around actual people. If seen or spoken to, the young child slowly shirks away before disappearing completely or just shrugging and walking off. Much like his father during his youth he can be quite rebellious and troublesome even when anyone tries to help him. Along with these quirks he also likes solitude among being with any company unless someone can bring him out of his shell. Underneath all of this lies the heart of a young sadist who can at any moment when provoked set alight a new means of destruction though this is only because he has had no real connection with people or family. Not one for talking or even showing emotions, this male would most like stare you down so to speak before speaking to you and if he does consider yourself lucky.  Underneath all the somber, silent treatments and silence, he is one of high intelligence and can show it without even having to utter a single work. Inside the deep workings of his mind, he feels that actions and gestures can express a persons true feelings rather than words.


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    Skills & Elements: Katon, Raiton, Doton, Ijutsu, Taijutsu, Kenjutsu & Fuuinjutsu
    Class: A
    Ryo: 1,105,125

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    Post by Copycat Fri Aug 31, 2018 2:03 pm

    You can't exceed the amount of EXP required for you to reach the next class with the EXP advantage UA, meaning the max you can get as an E-Class is 499.

    I'd personally suggest getting 240-250 EXP since that'd allow you to allocate 50% of the EXP you earn from then-on to your total EXP (aka. the EXP you need to class-up), and the other 50% to your debt, since that's how it works if you get 50% or below of what you need for the next class when concerning this type of UA. The choice is ultimately yours though.


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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Fri Aug 31, 2018 2:22 pm

    I didn't see anything about that in the rules....hmm.

    I'll get around to fixing it sometime today since I'll have to reconsider my options
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    Ryo: 1,105,125

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    Post by Copycat Fri Aug 31, 2018 2:23 pm

    Got it. Feel free to take your time.

    Also just a heads up; only two nature clan members can exist at a time. There're already two clan members at the moment so you'll have to find another clan. Sorry for the inconvenience ;-;.


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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Fri Aug 31, 2018 3:23 pm

    It says 3 on the clan app though...
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    Post by Copycat Fri Aug 31, 2018 8:45 pm

    Yeah that's outdated as far as I'm told. It's meant to be two--again, sorry for the inconvenience.


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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Fri Aug 31, 2018 8:47 pm

    ....okay then
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    Post by Nozomi Fri Aug 31, 2018 9:05 pm

    We are allowing 3 though, you're fine for the Nature clan


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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Fri Aug 31, 2018 11:22 pm

    Edits made
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    Post by Honiko Yoshidara Fri Aug 31, 2018 11:29 pm

    "Seal-less Combat: A player may choose to perform technique of a certain skill without hand seals. However, this is only gesture-less casting. The player must still "charge" their chakra and follow the other "tells" or triggers such technique requires. "

    *^ This is a Free Be UA for those without a bloodline. Because you have a bloodline it will need to be balanced with an flaw of equal value. My suggestion would be that Ninjutsu technique cost's an extra rank's worth of chakra when performed in this manner.

    Oh and you should fix your stats because it still says B-Tier Stamina and B-Tier Speed
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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Fri Aug 31, 2018 11:35 pm

    It said nothing about it being for people without bloodlines . Not in the UA for newbies thread at least. Could you provide me with the area that states that please?
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    Post by Honiko Yoshidara Fri Aug 31, 2018 11:55 pm

    -Characters starting without a Bloodline or Hiden Clan gain one free Unique Ability that doesn't need a matching Flaw.


    Its in the Character Registration Guide and Template. You are supposed to read that along with the UA guide so that you have some context for what UAs are and how they work. That's why the UA you found is under a spoiler titled "Free-Be UAs".
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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:00 am

    Done.
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    Post by Honiko Yoshidara Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:20 am

    Denied. You didn't do as I asked. Make it so that any sealless jutsu you perform costs an extra rank's worth of chakra.
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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:22 am

    ....that makes no sense but whatever I'll just remove it completely
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    Post by Honiko Yoshidara Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:28 am

    Do me a favor and state this for your Nature Boy UA: "All generated experience must go towards paying off that experience debt before it can be applied anywhere else"
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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:30 am

    ...Is this really necessary ? I literally based this off of other examples and that worked just fine beforehand.
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    Post by Honiko Yoshidara Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:32 am

    Not really I just want you to make sure you understand that before you accumulate any spendable or total experience you MUST pay back that 499. So up until you pay off your debt you will be at 0/499 and that will not change until the debt is repaid. So long as you understand that then its fine.
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    Post by Minamoto-No-Raikou Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:34 am

    ...I was fully aware when I was told about it before making my character and reading UA for it. Didn't think I needed to make it obvious for myself as well.
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    Post by Honiko Yoshidara Sat Sep 01, 2018 12:40 am

    Minamoto-No-Raikou wrote:Name: Tsubasa Tsumori
    Age: 8
    Gender: Male
    Village: Kirigakure
    Rank:  Genin
    Title: Minamoto-No-Raikou

    Clan: Nature Clan
    Bloodline: Sage Transformation
    Element(s): -
    Skill(s): Ninjutsu

    EXP Expenditure:


    Stats

    • Strength: C
    • Constitution: D
    • Stamina: C
    • Speed: C
    • Coordination: D
    • Intelligence: C
    • Perception: D


    Unique Abilities:

    Nature Boy: Due to everything that Tsubasa has been through in the past he has quite a bit more experience than one would expect from someone of his age and rank. This takes the form of 499 exp boost during creation, all of which must be paid back.




    Appearance:

    Tsubasa stands at 4'9 and weighs in at 100 lbs. Under any normal circumstance he is always seen with his hair down where it falls below his neck and stops just at the beginning  of his attire. While his hair is short and messy, the golden locks often find themselves curling up especially around the right side of his face, where his often has little tufts of hair sticking out. His eyes are a soft red color, and lower facial region is always covered by the sides of his collar.Moving on to his clothing, if he ever out and about he often wears this. Starting with the top he wears a tattered shirt underneath a white cloak.

    Moving onto the lower portion of his body he wears a pair of black pants which are held up by a single red sash. Attached to the golden buckle with holds the sash against the pants rests an ash grey and black pelt which drops just to the bells of his pants and rest comfortably against his sandals.In a situation that requires him to be properly dressed and ready his appearance changes. He wears a white mandarin collared sleeveless shirt, worn over by a black sleeveless stand up collared jacket. The bottom half consists of white pants wrapped around by a sarong and tied with an abrasive belt. Along the length of his nose lies his birthmark which to some look like a small scar. The jagged line starts from one side of his nose to the other much like the scar his father had. The scar currently sits under bandages that cover his face

    History:

    With his births unknown, Tsubasa's first breaths were not inside of a settlements hospital nor were they among the walls of a home. The first breaths and first sights of this illegitimate child were in a cavern far from his home and the family that probably never knew he existed. Held by those he embedded as his "family" he grew up with no mention of his family. As he lived with this group he was often on the run with the two of them, the mother and father hiding from someone or something for the longest time. At the age of six, the young male watched as his family was torn from him, an emotionless child who had yet to understand he had nothing in this world. For some reason the ninja took pity upon the child and took him with them back to the compound where he had been raised by them for some time before being put up for adoption.

    Personality:

    Tsubasa is very soft spoken and quite child who likes to stay away from people, due to his early upbringing and never really being around actual people. If seen or spoken to, the young child slowly shirks away before disappearing completely or just shrugging and walking off. Much like his father during his youth he can be quite rebellious and troublesome even when anyone tries to help him. Along with these quirks he also likes solitude among being with any company unless someone can bring him out of his shell. Underneath all of this lies the heart of a young sadist who can at any moment when provoked set alight a new means of destruction though this is only because he has had no real connection with people or family. Not one for talking or even showing emotions, this male would most like stare you down so to speak before speaking to you and if he does consider yourself lucky.  Underneath all the somber, silent treatments and silence, he is one of high intelligence and can show it without even having to utter a single work. Inside the deep workings of his mind, he feels that actions and gestures can express a persons true feelings rather than words.


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