Nee-san's Customs

Name: Focus
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: .5
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: A Rank Intelligence
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Nee-san's countless analyses of battles and the mechanics of combat have given him an extra edge in predicting an opponent's attacks. For a minor amount of chakra he is capable of recalling this information to boost his Perception by a ++.
Weaknesses: N/A

Name: Lightning Flash Puppet Creation
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: D (Sealing) E (Unsealing)
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Close Contact
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Fuuinjutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: Fuuinjutsu
Parent Technique: Unsealing Technique/Lightning Flash Blade Creation
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: This is a special "puppet summon" that allows the user to seal puppets or large scale constructs into a scroll or their clothes beforehand, allowing them to be called upon when needed. The puppets can be summoned in an instant just by touching the sealing "marks" which can be drawn anywhere. The greatest advantage of this technique is that the time between taking out a puppet. Furthermore, because the summoned puppets can remain hidden until right before they are used there are an exceptional number of possible tactics. 10 puppets can be stored within each sealing mark, which can make the efficiency of this technique last longer. The seal is about 4 inches and is the Kanji for puppet.
Weaknesses: N/A

Name: Gentle Steel
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: N/A
Upkeep Cost: 5
Range: Close Contact
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu/Taijutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: Fuuinjutsu
Parent Technique: Impervious Armour/Gentle Way/Steel Release
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: This style is an particular interpretation of the Iwagakure Military's Gentle Way style that enhances its defensive properties. The style also relies on Impervious Armour's ability to dampen the physical force behind blows. The user essentially protrudes ultra sharp spikes of steel via Impervious Armour in order to fend off blows while using the inherent structure of Gentle Way. This allows the user to actually further weaken the Strength behind an opponent's attacks such that the opponent hits with a one tier lower in terms of Strength in addition to the dispersal of force provided by Impervious Armour. The style was designed by Nee-san to be a close quarters defensive posture allowing him to deflect and block attacks while still maintained exquisite control over his puppets.
Weaknesses: N/A

Name: Minor Reinforcement
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: D
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range:Self
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Steel Release
Parent Technique: Impervious Armour
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: For a small upkeep, Nee-san can reinforce his Impervious Armour grade by a ++ giving it an extra bit of reinforcement that lasts for 5 posts.
Weaknesses: N/A

Name: Nimble Fingers
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 2
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range:  Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Kugutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: A puppeteer's hands are quick and nimble as a result of years of training. They have mastered the art of using chakra to increase their coordination in general and their dexterity for their hands in particular. The user's Coordination is increased by a + and their coordination for the purpose of anything involving their hands or arms are increased by a ++. Lasts 5 posts.
Weaknesses: N/A

Name: Equilibrium
Rank: A
Power: C
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: 1
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Yin Healing Wound Destruction/Ijutsu Skill
Parent Technique: Yin Healing Would Destruction
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Equilibrium is Nee-san's specific interpretation of the Yin Healing Wound Destruction. Whereas Yin Healing Wound Destruction aims to preemptively heal major instances of direct damage, Equilibrium functions so as to keep the user's body in a constant state of equilibrium by maintaining a background healing factor. The user essentially disperses their chakra across their body and preemptively heals or alters their physicality to avoid environmental and miasma damage. This has the effect of partially immunizing the user to debuffs resulting from ninjutsu. This technique also has the effect of protecting from the negative effects of drastic shifts in the environment from area of effect ninjutsu. The user's immune system and overall body hardens itself and responds to changes in the body's feedback loop so as to put its functioning right back where it would normally be. This immunizes the user's Coordination stat up to a maximum of four minuses.
Weaknesses: This technique cannot heal direct and concentrated damage the way that Yin Healing Wound Destruction can. This technique only applies to area of effect ninjutsu and does not immunize debuffs from other sources. This only affect Debuffs that apply to the body in a harmful way for example techniques that hurt the user by drastically changing temperature or Body Pathway Derangement. It would not prevent debuffs that attaches stones for example.

Nee-san Tetsudashi wrote:Name: Focus
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: N/A
Classification: Personal
Requirements: A Rank Intelligence
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Nee-san's countless analyses of battles and the mechanics of combat have given him an extra edge in predicting an opponent's attacks. For a minor amount of chakra he is capable of recalling this information to boost his Perception by a ++
Weaknesses: N/A

Since this isn't relegated to one specific skill, gonna need a 3 point activation and 1 point upkeep.

Name: Lightning Flash Puppet Creation
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: D (Sealing) E (Unsealing)
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Close Contact
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Fuuinjutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: Fuuinjutsu
Parent Technique: Unsealing Technique/Lightning Flash Blade Creation
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: This is a special "puppet summon" that allows the user to seal puppets or large scale constructs into a scroll or their clothes beforehand, allowing them to be called upon when needed. The puppets can be summoned in an instant just by touching the sealing "marks" which can be drawn anywhere. The greatest advantage of this technique is that the time between taking out a puppet. Furthermore, because the summoned puppets can remain hidden until right before they are used there are an exceptional number of possible tactics. One hundred puppets can be stored within each sealing mark, which can make the efficiency of this technique last longer.
Weaknesses: N/A

Ehhhhh, cap it at one puppet per seal. I feel like this could be heavily abused without much effort on the part of the user. Also, note how large the seal is please.

Name: Gentle Steel
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: N/A
Upkeep Cost: 2
Range: Close Contact
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu/Taijutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: Fuuinjutsu
Parent Technique: Impervious Armour/Gentle Way/Steel Release
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: This style is an particular interpretation of the Iwagakure Military's Gentle Way style that enhances its defensive properties. The style also relies on Impervious Armour's ability to dampen the physical force behind blows as well as Yin Healing Wound's precognitive healing abilities. The user essentially protrudes ultra sharp spikes of steel via Impervious Armour in order to fend off blows while using the inherent structure of Gentle Way. This allows the user to actually further weaken the Strength behind an opponent's attacks by a single tier in addition to the dispersal of force provided by Impervious Armour. The style was designed by Nee-san to be a close quarters defensive posture allowing him to deflect and block attacks while still maintained exquisite control over his puppets.
Weaknesses: N/A

How exactly does this lower an opponent's strength? I feel like it would read better if it said that it disperses the force better and makes any blows hit at one tier lower strength rather than actually lowering their strength. I know, it's just wordplay, but the wording as is just doesn't feel right to me. Also, what does Yin Wound Healing Destruction have to do with this? You're not healing anything, just making some spikes to deter physical contact. How large are these spikes?

Name: Minor Reinforcement
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: D
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range:Self
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Steel Release
Parent Technique: Impervious Armour
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: For a small upkeep, Nee-san can reinforce his Impervious Armour grade by a ++ giving it an extra bit of reinforcement that lasts for 5 posts.
Weaknesses: N/A

If this is a constant effect, it'll need an upkeep too or a higher activation cost.

Tsuyo wrote:
Since this isn't relegated to one specific skill, gonna need a 3 point activation and 1 point upkeep.

I made it a Ninjutsu Skill.

Ehhhhh, cap it at one puppet per seal. I feel like this could be heavily abused without much effort on the part of the user. Also, note how large the seal is please.

One puppet per seal would make it essentially the Generic Sealing technique. Would reducing it to ten puppets per seal work?

Added on how large the size the seal is.

Tsuyo wrote:
How exactly does this lower an opponent's strength? I feel like it would read better if it said that it disperses the force better and makes any blows hit at one tier lower strength rather than actually lowering their strength. I know, it's just wordplay, but the wording as is just doesn't feel right to me. Also, what does Yin Wound Healing Destruction have to do with this? You're not healing anything, just making some spikes to deter physical contact. How large are these spikes?

Edited. Removed Yin Healing Wound Destruction. I personally plan on them being 3 inches-6 inches but Impervious Armour by itself allows free form creation of minor ninja tools so I guess they could also be significantly larger up to the size of katana but that would be fairly unwieldy.

Name: Minor Reinforcement
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: D
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range:Self
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Steel Release
Parent Technique: Impervious Armour
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: For a small upkeep, Nee-san can reinforce his Impervious Armour grade by a ++ giving it an extra bit of reinforcement that lasts for 5 posts.
Weaknesses: N/A

If this is a constant effect, it'll need an upkeep too or a higher activation cost.[/quote]

It only lasts for 5 posts.

Focus- You could do a 0.5 upkeep due to the high Int Req, but the Activation will still need to be 3 pts to balance the boost.

Lightning Flash Puppet Creation- This is fine.

Gentle Steel- I'm assuming this effect stacks with Impervious Armor, which has its own cost, and that this style is replacing Gentle Way. If that's true, then the Upkeep needs to be increased to 5 pts and it'll be good to go. This is functioning as a B-Rank Debuff, but as a Tai Style, it just needs the C-Rank upkeep.

Minor Reinforcement- This is fine.

Nimble Fingers- You've got an E boost in one part of the body and a D boost in another. You can have a 2 point Activation for that.

Equilibrium- The way this reads, it should only affect Debuffs that apply to the body in a harmful way. You could somewhat recover the damage caused by Pathway Derangement, for example, but if a technique directly attaches stone to your body to slow it down, then you're getting Debuff no matter how much you heal. So, reword it to clarify the specific field of Debuffs that it can prevent, and in that case, you can increase the protection by one.

Focus edited. Since it has an upkeep I took out the time limit.

Gentle Steel assumptions are correct and edited to reflect such

Nimble Fingers edited.

Equilibrium edited.

Nee-san Tetsudashi wrote:

Spoiler:

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Name: Mercutio
Rank: A
Power: A
Activation Cost: 15
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: 0m-30m
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Steel Release
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: Ram
Description: The user channels their Steel Release into their body and exhales a gaseous cloud of pure mercury. The cloud rapidly increases in size and volume spreading over a 30 meter area at a rate of ten meters per post.The mercury particles contain small sharp razors allowing them to cut through fabrics and other protective gear (Material Rank of C and below) as well as basic rebreather apparatuses. Once introduced into the bloodstream via breathing them in or laceration, this technique mimics the effects of mercury poisoning. The opponent will experience a tier and a minus to Perception.
Weaknesses: This technique may harm allies as well if they are not careful.

Name: Bulk Apperception
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can coat their nerve endings with bits of Steel Release to increase neural conductivity allowing the user to process information faster and more efficiently. By taking mental processes dedicated towards processing and abstract thinking they can enhance their "battle sense". This allows the user to increase their Perception by one + for every minus they choose to incur in Intelligence.
Weaknesses: For every plus they receive in Perception they must take a minus in Intelligence.

Name: Neurokinesis
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: D
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can dedicate various neurons to healing the body faster and more efficiently. By taking mental processes dedicated towards cell regeneration and pain resistance. This technique essentially strategically forms benign cysts and tumors around nerve endings drastically reducing the user's ability to feel pain. This allows the user to increase their Constitution by a tier and a minus
Weaknesses: For every plus they receive in Constitution they must take a minus in Intelligence.

Name: Fragmentation
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: C
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can fire Steel Release fragments from their body or from puppets under their direct control via the Reinforcement Technique. These fragments are fired at a Speed of C Rank and embed themselves within the target. The force and speed is strong enough to hit with the force of a bullet and once embedded the fragments release wire-like tendrils within six square inches of the initial impact. The tendrils then constrict and crush with a Strength of B Rank.
Weaknesses: N/A

Name: Mercutio
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: 0m-30m
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Steel Release
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: Ram
Description: The user channels their Steel Release into their body and exhales a gaseous cloud of pure mercury. The cloud rapidly increases in size and volume spreading over a 30 meter area at a rate of ten meters per post.The mercury particles contain small sharp razors allowing them to cut through fabrics and other protective gear (Material Rank of C and below) as well as basic rebreather apparatuses. Once introduced into the bloodstream via breathing them in or laceration, this technique mimics the effects of mercury poisoning. The opponent will experience a minus to Perception, Coordination, and Speed per post capping at a tier in each area.
Weaknesses: This technique may harm allies as well if they are not careful.

Since this is also making blades and can actually cut through materials, you're gonna need to make this A rank in cost. Additionally, that's 3 tiers of debuffs which is far too much for the cost even at A rank. Tone it down or add a lot more drawbacks.

Name: Bulk Apperception
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can dedicate various neurons to processing information faster and more efficiently. By taking mental processes dedicated towards processing and abstract thinking they can enhance their "battle sense". This allows the user to increase their Perception by one + by incurring a minus to Intelligence.
Weaknesses: N/A

Controlling neurons insinuates to me that Raiton would be needed, as neurons fire on electricity. Also, see my comments below on Neurokinesis with regards to boosts and cost.

Name: Neurokinesis
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can dedicate various neurons to healing the body faster and more efficiently. By taking mental processes dedicated towards cell regeneration and pain resistance. This technique essentially strategically forms benign cysts and tumors around nerve endings drastically reducing the user's ability to feel pain. This allows the user to increase their Constitution by one + by incurring a minus to Intelligence.
Weaknesses: N/A

This doesn't really heal anything, but I like the idea. Take out that part about it healing to clean it up. You could also lower the cost a lot since you're giving yourself a minus while using this. By keeping it at this level, you could actually get away with an E rank activation and 2 pluses to Constitution.

Name: Fragmentation
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: B
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can fire Steel Release fragments from their body or from puppets under their direct control via the Reinforcement Technique. These fragments are fired at a Speed of B Rank and embed themselves within the target. The force and speed is strong enough to hit with the force of a bullet and once embedded the fragments release wire-like tendrils within six square inches of the initial impact. The tendrils then constrict and crush with a Strength of B Rank.
Weaknesses: N/A

Mmmmmm, either up the rank/cost one or lower the speed one tier.

I should probably be a lot less vague in writing my techniques lol. I fixed the jutsu but I re-wrote because I think the way I wrote it before insinuates its a lot less powerful in that it only trades a single + for a single minus when in actually its meant to trade as many minuses for as many pluses as the user needs.

I disagree that Raiton is need for Bulk Apperception. Any technique that increases Perception will undoubtedly affect neurons in the same way that any technique that affects strength will affect muscles. Making Raiton a requirement for a Perception boost is not necessary.

Rank: A
Power: A
Activation Cost: 15
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: 0m-30m
Speed: N/A
Element: Steel Release
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Steel Release
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: Ram
Description: The user channels their Steel Release into their body and exhales a gaseous cloud of pure mercury. The cloud rapidly increases in size and volume spreading over a 30 meter area at a rate of ten meters per post.The mercury particles contain small sharp razors allowing them to cut through fabrics and other protective gear (Material Rank of C and below) as well as basic rebreather apparatuses. Once introduced into the bloodstream via breathing them in or laceration, this technique mimics the effects of mercury poisoning. The opponent will experience a minus to Perception and Coordination per post capping at a tier in each area.
Weaknesses: This technique may harm allies as well if they are not careful.

The maximum debuff for an A rank technique is 4 minuses according to the debuff guidelines, so those will need edited accordingly. Since you're still cutting through material with miniature blades, I'm going to have to ask you to make the cost 18 rather than 15.

Name: Neurokinesis
Rank: B
Power: B
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: N/A
Range: Self
Speed: N/A
Element: N/A
Skill: Ninjutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: N/A
Parent Technique: N/A
Hand Seals: N/A
Description: Using this technique, the user can dedicate various neurons to healing the body faster and more efficiently. By taking mental processes dedicated towards cell regeneration and pain resistance. This technique essentially strategically forms benign cysts and tumors around nerve endings drastically reducing the user's ability to feel pain. This allows the user to increase their Constitution by one + for every minus they choose to incur in Intelligence.
Weaknesses: For every plus they receive in Constitution they must take a minus in Intelligence.

Cap it at one tier and 1+. Being able to do this indefinitely makes stat allocations pointless. You can, however, make the cost D rank as you're doing an even exchange for the boosts so the cost doesn't need to be as high.



You still have B listed as the speed for Fragmentation in the Speed field. As to Bulk, there are other ways to boost Perception than by directly affecting the neurons with chakra. However, if you relate this to Steel Release and use Ijutsu with your S rank intelligence I can possibly see you being able to make the neurons more conductive so as to make the signals travel faster. A bit of a change for description, but hey, I'm picky. Sorry haha.

Tsuyo wrote:Since you're still cutting through material with miniature blades, I'm going to have to ask you to make the cost 18 rather than 15.

I fixed everything except for this because you originally said the fact that it could cut through material made the cost 15. 18 is too much, that's not the number you gave before.

That was under the assumption you edited your debuffs to suit the cost along with this additional ability. You still have it as an A rank debuff, so your 15 activation pays for those four minuses. The ability to cut through C grade materials as you have listed I'm willing to give to you for a rank less in cost compared to what it can cut through. That is D rank, which is an additional 3. My apologies for not being clearer with what I meant, I'll be sure that it doesn't happen again. Thanks for pointing it out.

For Bulk, I forgot to add that you'll need to cap this to one tier and one plus for the same reason as Neurokinesis. Cost may be reduced similarly. Once that's done, it'll be good to go.

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